The way students can fill their hunger when their mothers are not at home
The five steps of making ramyon
You feel exhausted and starving after school, so you hustle to your home to eat delicious
snack your mom would provide. But when you arrived at home, you soon find out that your
mom went out, and that she will be gone for hours. Then how should you fill your hunger?
Would you have to wait for your mom? The answer I will say is "No." Instead, you should make
ramyon to fulfill your desire. Ramyon is a popular Korean instant noodle with a little spicy soup.
It is quick, cheap, simple to make, and yet delicious. Five minutes is enough to make delicious
ramyon. You do not have to be a skilled cook or have expensive equipments at all. And the
coolest thing is that you no longer need your mom for snacks. You will be proud of yourself that
you made your own snack. There are basically five steps of making ram yon.
Before you begin making ram yon, what you should first do is to check if you have all the
necessary materials. You need two iron pots, chopstick, water, and ram yon packet that you can
buy from a supermarket for 500 won. You can also bring kimchi and rice if you want to. Next,
gently peel off the packet. That is it for the first step.
When you have all the equipments, the second step is to put the iron pots over a fire. You
must make sure that you have permission from your mom to use fire and that it is safe to use it.
Then put 550 milliliter of water in both pots. Putting accurate amount of water will make the
soup and noodles taste better, so be as accurate as possible. Next, start boiling the water in the
pots, and make sure to close the pots with lids, so the water will not evaporate as it is heated up. Now get ready to proceed to the most important part.
When water is boiling briskly, put ramyon sauce and the noodles into the two separated pots, which is the third step. Be very careful when you put the noodles in. Do not ever just drop
it from air like a bungee jump because splash of hot water will hurt you. This process is certainly
the most important part because when to put noodles into water determines the taste. If you put itin too soon, the noodles will just taste like soft eraser dust; however, if you put it in too late, thenit will taste like crunchy grits dipped in water for a while, and you would never want that kind ofnoodles especially when you are hungry. Go to the next step if you grabbed chopstick.
The fourth step is stirring the noodles clockwise with chopstick, so they will be soft. Also
do not forget to spread the ram yon sauce to help the soup taste better. Usually it takes around
three to four minutes for the noodles to become soft. You are definitely fine to proceed to the
next step if you see the soft ram yon noodles and reddish soup.
Not many people know this fifth strategy besides my family. What you have to do is to
take out the water in the pot that has noodles in, and to put the noodles into the pot that has
ramyon soup. The noodles get less oily by this process. Now you are done making ram yon if you
stir and spread the noodles out calmly. Now it is time for you to enjoy your snack that you have
made in five minutes. Pick the noodles up and blow on, so you will not bum your mouth, and
enjoy it. You could eat ram yon with kimchi if you think Korean food suits you. It is also possible
for you to put rice in the soup if you are very hungry. You may make ram yon whenever you feel hungry.
Outline
Intro
Are you starving? Do not wait for your mom, and make your own ramyon
First body
Materials, equipments
Second body
Put the pots over a fire
Third body
Put ramyon into the pot and sauce to the other pot
Fourth body
Stir sauce & noodles
Fifth body (Conclusion)
Take out the water in the pot that had noodles in and put the noodles to the pot that has
soup
Tuesday, January 23, 2007
Poems Portfolio
All the poems I have written are dedicated to my dearest love, Jamie, and my prettiest friend Minj, who is always there for me.
Preface
I used to kind of avoid writing because I liked math more than writing. However, in writing class, I had to write poems. Since I had to express ideas in limited words, I had to concentrate hard to convey my idea. The place I found that helped me concentrate on writing poems is restroom, actually. It might sound weird, but it really is a best place for me. It is because I can not fall asleep since it is cold in there, and it is also because it is uncomfortable to sit on a toilet. Thus, it makes me be able to not fall asleep but concentrate on writing poems. My most inspired work is a doorway poem. It is because I liked the format of the poem because it was to contrast two ideas. I thought of two distinctly different characteristics. And I concluded it to be myself because I am both negative and sometimes positive toward my life. And since I could feel that right when I wake up, I started writing about how I felt.
When teachers leave good comments on what I have written, I am very inspired to keep on writing. Also, some comments that tell me what I need to work more on also inspire me because now I am clear what I need to do. When I am sure what I am good at and what I need to work more on, I am inspired. I am also inspired when I got fairly good grades because the grades show me how far I have reached. Things I value in the writing process are pre-writing, revising. I value pre-writing because it is the very first step of starting to write something, because it is time to have all the ideas that I want to put in the writing work, and because I never have to worry about getting sentences grammatically correct or sentence fluency, or about being consistent with my thesis in one paragraph. I also value revising because it is the part where I now need to organize my thoughts into particular categories. I also think revising is one of the most important parts of the writing process because it is a part to put voice in the writing. There are a lot of things I have learned in this class. The five things we have learned so far are ideas, organization, voice, word choice, conventions. The knowledge of word choice and voice helped me use thesaurus more than usual to have more powerful verbs to picture the image better. Knowledge of conventions made me check if I am consistent with my verb tense. It also made me use grammar check in word document. Knowledge of organization and ideas helped me revise my writing once more to check if I have a paragraph with only one specific topic. From this class, I think I improved my writing skills a lot.
I am…
Twisting
Snoring loudly
Slobbering and rolling
In a car with my mouth open
Sleeping
In a soccer field...!!
Imbalanced drum sound and screaming
Pervade my ear
The closer the ball gets to the goal
The more, higher I shout
Still stick my eyes to the ball
No sound distracts my concentration
The ball eventually penetrates the goal
I leave my mouth open
Leap and jump as high as I could
Shout hoarsely till my throat burns
No poems please
Has too much meaning in a few words like a proverb
Have too many implications I need to think of that I never even realized
Have too many things that make me think just like when I fell in love
Is too short to even read and think about
Feels like I am playing hide and go seek with the hidden meaning in a poem
But Draws an image in my mind
Feels like I figured out the answer of a riddle when I understood the implications
Fun once I understand like funky music
Fun to read out loud as the words rhyme
Fun to look at as an image Fun to try to write one
A doorway in my mind
I live in a doorway
Between the two rooms
A cacophony of an alarm clock irritates me
Wake up in the morning, tired
Apathy fills my body
No energy to open eyes
Pull my bedclothes over my head
Turn my body away from the window
Trying to avoid the light
Sound of rain tapping the window
Never stops but annoys me forever
Inevitable get up with a deep sigh
Negative
A harmony of a clock reveals it is bright morning
Open my eyes, breathing fresh, cold air in
Wake up in the morning vigorously
Passion fills my body Kick the bedclothes out
Stretch my body with joy
Till my arms could reach the ceiling
Glare at the window Sun shines on me
Get up with enthusiasm
Positive
A shortcut to death
You must quit right away
You get addicted once you breathe
The ones you have need to be taken away
It bugs you, leads you to death
You get addicted once you breathe
Isn’t the smell bothersome?
It bugs you, leads you to death
Does it feel awesome?
Isn’t the smell bothersome?
The smoke darkens your lung
Does it feel awesome?
Your precious life would not last long
The smoke darkens your lung
Is it comfortable?
Your precious life would not last long
Once you started it, your life will be unstable
Is it comfortable?
The ones you have need to be taken away
Once you started it, your life will be unstable
You must quit right away
peer assessments
Sound
The message the writer Mr. Bock has written is pretty clear, concise, fairly well focused. However, the writer needs to be consistent with the type of poem and should focus more on it. The writer needs to have more ideas that could describe the sound in a soccer field. The topic itself is not bad, but the writer needs to have more illustrations and description of how it sounds. The writer does not make errors that are so noticeable that they even distract readers to read. Yet, minor mistakes are sometimes seen and need to be fixed. Although the mistakes do not make the whole writing vague, but better grammar and conventions will help the writing look better. Punctuations are not bad as the writer keeps the tense as present tense. The writer needs to organize the writing a bit. Although the pattern is appropriate for genre, topic, and purpose, better organization will help understand the image of the poem surely. The reader can follow along or locate key information without undue difficulty. The voice of the writing seems like the part the writer definitely needs to work on. The writer needs to bring more interesting and powerful verbs to illustrate a clearer picture. The paper does not stand out from others. Descriptive adjectives and adverbs will be helpful to the writing. The writer has some knowledge of the topic but more would create needed confidence. Word choice is also a part the writer does need to work more on. Harder and more in-depth words are in need. In order to make the writing better, the writer needs to have more words that describe the sound specifically. The writing is clear inmost cases. Language is appropriate for purpose and audience. But more creative word choice is needed to improve the writing. Despite a bumpy moment or two, it is fairly easy to read this piece. Sentences show some variety but more is needed. More words that describe the image or the sound of a soccer field with fluent sentences will make the writing awesome.
List
The writer has pretty good and interesting ideas, but better organization and more descriptive words are needed. Message makes sense. The main idea, thesis, story line is pretty easy to identify, fairly well-defined. More ideas are needed also. More creative ways of presenting the ideas would have also helped improve the writing. Not many mistakes are easily seen, but some mistakes need to be fixed to improve the writing. The impact of those errors on the text is insignificant. The writer shows control over numerous conventions. Punctuations are not bad also. The organization pattern is appropriate for genre, topic, and purpose. The structure is pretty interesting as putting “but” in the middle of the poem. It serves as a transition word. The word changes the mood from negative to positive side. Two distinct different parts are well compared as putting one word as a stanza. The reader can follow along or locate key information without undue difficulty The writing does not stand out from others besides that it has an interesting word in the middle by itself making a stanza. There needs to be more descriptive words such as powerful verbs, adjectives, and adverbs. They will help improve the quality of the writing since it makes clearer and more specific ideas and images. The writing needs to be more appealing to keep readers reading. The writing is a functional, sincere voice. The writing is clear inmost cases. However, better words could have been chosen in order to help the writing make better. The language is appropriate for purpose and audience. As mentioned before, more descriptive words need to be chosen, so the writing could have more interesting pictures. The writing does not lack image, but the image is not clear enough to some readers. Sentences are fluent except some minor errors. Those errors need to be fixed to make the writing smooth. The writing is quite easy to read. But some sentences need to be varied, adding to the voice, in order to prevent reader getting bored with all the similar sentences. Maybe transition words could help make the writing even more fluent.
Pantoum
Message is clear, concise, fairly well-focused. It can also be summarized. The ideas should have been expressed with more images. The writer should dig deeper and think harder. The writer should describe why smoking is bad or why he or she should quit smoking. More description and details would be helpful. Punctuations are not bad as keeping up with one tense. A few errors are noticeable if looking at the errors closely. Errors are not significant. Despite some slips, the writer shows reasonable control over most conventions. The writing pattern works for this genre, topic, and purpose. Also, the writing correctly follows all the rules such as rhymes and patterns. However, sentences should be more closely related to each other to organize the writing better. The reader can follow or locate key information without difficulty. The writing does not stand out from others. This piece is appropriately restrained or courteous. The most serious problem of this writing is that it lacks descriptive words such as descriptive verbs, adjectives, and adverbs. More descriptions are necessary to make the writing better. They will help picture clearer images. The writing is clear and often original. Word choice is not bad but better choices are pretty much essential to make the writing better. Some boring and repetitive words need to be replaced to more interesting words. They will help give personality. The writing is generally balanced. Sentences are pretty fluent. Sentences are varied, but still need some work.
Cinquain
The writer Eugene Bock is very clear on his ideas. His idea is very focus on the topic. The writer’s poem is very concise and gets straight to the point. It’s easy to summarize as well. He has a great depth of understanding of his poem. The story line is very clear and easy to determine or identify. Seeing as the writer’s poem is so short it doesn’t really have a sense of direction because it’s only five lines long. The writer’s poem is supported by his own experience I assume. The result of the poem is satisfying and it answers any questions the readers might have. The writer uses conventions very well with no errors that are noticeable. His conventions bring out meaning because it’s what people do when they are sleeping in a car. The writer seems to have control over his conventions. His conventions are outstanding. The writer’s organization is suited to the genre, topic, and purpose. The structure of the writer’s poem does guide the readers through the piece. The elements in the writer’s piece is just right for the readers. The transitions between lines I guess are some what smooth, but kind of bumpy if you know what I mean it’s not quite smooth The writer’s voice is functional and sincere. He might share just little moments aloud. The writer’s piece has a balance between honesty but… not so much passion. The writer has knowledge of the topic because it’s within experience. The writer’s writing is clear and precise it’s quite original as well. The language is suited to the writer’s purpose and the audience. The phrasing tends to be lively. The writer is balanced, not inflated or simplistic. The writer uses verbs to make his piece more alive and moving to see an image. Modifiers support meaning, voice and or imagery and they are never overdone.
Autobiographic
The poem Mr. Bock had written was pretty well-written. Message is clear and voice also good. Word choices were really fantastic! Difference between negative and positive seems to make a big definition through this. He supported the main idea with numerous details and they’re all fun. I can see only pickiest errors, but they don’t really matter the poem. The organization pattern is really good that connects the topic. I cautiously suggest him to give a better idea that helps readers to know that ‘I live in a doorway, between the two rooms’ can really connect the words for negative and positive His ending with comparing negative and positive is pretty good idea. His voices are really good that gives two strong ideas for his topic. His good word choices and descriptions made me more interested into the poem.
Preface
I used to kind of avoid writing because I liked math more than writing. However, in writing class, I had to write poems. Since I had to express ideas in limited words, I had to concentrate hard to convey my idea. The place I found that helped me concentrate on writing poems is restroom, actually. It might sound weird, but it really is a best place for me. It is because I can not fall asleep since it is cold in there, and it is also because it is uncomfortable to sit on a toilet. Thus, it makes me be able to not fall asleep but concentrate on writing poems. My most inspired work is a doorway poem. It is because I liked the format of the poem because it was to contrast two ideas. I thought of two distinctly different characteristics. And I concluded it to be myself because I am both negative and sometimes positive toward my life. And since I could feel that right when I wake up, I started writing about how I felt.
When teachers leave good comments on what I have written, I am very inspired to keep on writing. Also, some comments that tell me what I need to work more on also inspire me because now I am clear what I need to do. When I am sure what I am good at and what I need to work more on, I am inspired. I am also inspired when I got fairly good grades because the grades show me how far I have reached. Things I value in the writing process are pre-writing, revising. I value pre-writing because it is the very first step of starting to write something, because it is time to have all the ideas that I want to put in the writing work, and because I never have to worry about getting sentences grammatically correct or sentence fluency, or about being consistent with my thesis in one paragraph. I also value revising because it is the part where I now need to organize my thoughts into particular categories. I also think revising is one of the most important parts of the writing process because it is a part to put voice in the writing. There are a lot of things I have learned in this class. The five things we have learned so far are ideas, organization, voice, word choice, conventions. The knowledge of word choice and voice helped me use thesaurus more than usual to have more powerful verbs to picture the image better. Knowledge of conventions made me check if I am consistent with my verb tense. It also made me use grammar check in word document. Knowledge of organization and ideas helped me revise my writing once more to check if I have a paragraph with only one specific topic. From this class, I think I improved my writing skills a lot.
I am…
Twisting
Snoring loudly
Slobbering and rolling
In a car with my mouth open
Sleeping
In a soccer field...!!
Imbalanced drum sound and screaming
Pervade my ear
The closer the ball gets to the goal
The more, higher I shout
Still stick my eyes to the ball
No sound distracts my concentration
The ball eventually penetrates the goal
I leave my mouth open
Leap and jump as high as I could
Shout hoarsely till my throat burns
No poems please
Has too much meaning in a few words like a proverb
Have too many implications I need to think of that I never even realized
Have too many things that make me think just like when I fell in love
Is too short to even read and think about
Feels like I am playing hide and go seek with the hidden meaning in a poem
But Draws an image in my mind
Feels like I figured out the answer of a riddle when I understood the implications
Fun once I understand like funky music
Fun to read out loud as the words rhyme
Fun to look at as an image Fun to try to write one
A doorway in my mind
I live in a doorway
Between the two rooms
A cacophony of an alarm clock irritates me
Wake up in the morning, tired
Apathy fills my body
No energy to open eyes
Pull my bedclothes over my head
Turn my body away from the window
Trying to avoid the light
Sound of rain tapping the window
Never stops but annoys me forever
Inevitable get up with a deep sigh
Negative
A harmony of a clock reveals it is bright morning
Open my eyes, breathing fresh, cold air in
Wake up in the morning vigorously
Passion fills my body Kick the bedclothes out
Stretch my body with joy
Till my arms could reach the ceiling
Glare at the window Sun shines on me
Get up with enthusiasm
Positive
A shortcut to death
You must quit right away
You get addicted once you breathe
The ones you have need to be taken away
It bugs you, leads you to death
You get addicted once you breathe
Isn’t the smell bothersome?
It bugs you, leads you to death
Does it feel awesome?
Isn’t the smell bothersome?
The smoke darkens your lung
Does it feel awesome?
Your precious life would not last long
The smoke darkens your lung
Is it comfortable?
Your precious life would not last long
Once you started it, your life will be unstable
Is it comfortable?
The ones you have need to be taken away
Once you started it, your life will be unstable
You must quit right away
peer assessments
Sound
The message the writer Mr. Bock has written is pretty clear, concise, fairly well focused. However, the writer needs to be consistent with the type of poem and should focus more on it. The writer needs to have more ideas that could describe the sound in a soccer field. The topic itself is not bad, but the writer needs to have more illustrations and description of how it sounds. The writer does not make errors that are so noticeable that they even distract readers to read. Yet, minor mistakes are sometimes seen and need to be fixed. Although the mistakes do not make the whole writing vague, but better grammar and conventions will help the writing look better. Punctuations are not bad as the writer keeps the tense as present tense. The writer needs to organize the writing a bit. Although the pattern is appropriate for genre, topic, and purpose, better organization will help understand the image of the poem surely. The reader can follow along or locate key information without undue difficulty. The voice of the writing seems like the part the writer definitely needs to work on. The writer needs to bring more interesting and powerful verbs to illustrate a clearer picture. The paper does not stand out from others. Descriptive adjectives and adverbs will be helpful to the writing. The writer has some knowledge of the topic but more would create needed confidence. Word choice is also a part the writer does need to work more on. Harder and more in-depth words are in need. In order to make the writing better, the writer needs to have more words that describe the sound specifically. The writing is clear inmost cases. Language is appropriate for purpose and audience. But more creative word choice is needed to improve the writing. Despite a bumpy moment or two, it is fairly easy to read this piece. Sentences show some variety but more is needed. More words that describe the image or the sound of a soccer field with fluent sentences will make the writing awesome.
List
The writer has pretty good and interesting ideas, but better organization and more descriptive words are needed. Message makes sense. The main idea, thesis, story line is pretty easy to identify, fairly well-defined. More ideas are needed also. More creative ways of presenting the ideas would have also helped improve the writing. Not many mistakes are easily seen, but some mistakes need to be fixed to improve the writing. The impact of those errors on the text is insignificant. The writer shows control over numerous conventions. Punctuations are not bad also. The organization pattern is appropriate for genre, topic, and purpose. The structure is pretty interesting as putting “but” in the middle of the poem. It serves as a transition word. The word changes the mood from negative to positive side. Two distinct different parts are well compared as putting one word as a stanza. The reader can follow along or locate key information without undue difficulty The writing does not stand out from others besides that it has an interesting word in the middle by itself making a stanza. There needs to be more descriptive words such as powerful verbs, adjectives, and adverbs. They will help improve the quality of the writing since it makes clearer and more specific ideas and images. The writing needs to be more appealing to keep readers reading. The writing is a functional, sincere voice. The writing is clear inmost cases. However, better words could have been chosen in order to help the writing make better. The language is appropriate for purpose and audience. As mentioned before, more descriptive words need to be chosen, so the writing could have more interesting pictures. The writing does not lack image, but the image is not clear enough to some readers. Sentences are fluent except some minor errors. Those errors need to be fixed to make the writing smooth. The writing is quite easy to read. But some sentences need to be varied, adding to the voice, in order to prevent reader getting bored with all the similar sentences. Maybe transition words could help make the writing even more fluent.
Pantoum
Message is clear, concise, fairly well-focused. It can also be summarized. The ideas should have been expressed with more images. The writer should dig deeper and think harder. The writer should describe why smoking is bad or why he or she should quit smoking. More description and details would be helpful. Punctuations are not bad as keeping up with one tense. A few errors are noticeable if looking at the errors closely. Errors are not significant. Despite some slips, the writer shows reasonable control over most conventions. The writing pattern works for this genre, topic, and purpose. Also, the writing correctly follows all the rules such as rhymes and patterns. However, sentences should be more closely related to each other to organize the writing better. The reader can follow or locate key information without difficulty. The writing does not stand out from others. This piece is appropriately restrained or courteous. The most serious problem of this writing is that it lacks descriptive words such as descriptive verbs, adjectives, and adverbs. More descriptions are necessary to make the writing better. They will help picture clearer images. The writing is clear and often original. Word choice is not bad but better choices are pretty much essential to make the writing better. Some boring and repetitive words need to be replaced to more interesting words. They will help give personality. The writing is generally balanced. Sentences are pretty fluent. Sentences are varied, but still need some work.
Cinquain
The writer Eugene Bock is very clear on his ideas. His idea is very focus on the topic. The writer’s poem is very concise and gets straight to the point. It’s easy to summarize as well. He has a great depth of understanding of his poem. The story line is very clear and easy to determine or identify. Seeing as the writer’s poem is so short it doesn’t really have a sense of direction because it’s only five lines long. The writer’s poem is supported by his own experience I assume. The result of the poem is satisfying and it answers any questions the readers might have. The writer uses conventions very well with no errors that are noticeable. His conventions bring out meaning because it’s what people do when they are sleeping in a car. The writer seems to have control over his conventions. His conventions are outstanding. The writer’s organization is suited to the genre, topic, and purpose. The structure of the writer’s poem does guide the readers through the piece. The elements in the writer’s piece is just right for the readers. The transitions between lines I guess are some what smooth, but kind of bumpy if you know what I mean it’s not quite smooth The writer’s voice is functional and sincere. He might share just little moments aloud. The writer’s piece has a balance between honesty but… not so much passion. The writer has knowledge of the topic because it’s within experience. The writer’s writing is clear and precise it’s quite original as well. The language is suited to the writer’s purpose and the audience. The phrasing tends to be lively. The writer is balanced, not inflated or simplistic. The writer uses verbs to make his piece more alive and moving to see an image. Modifiers support meaning, voice and or imagery and they are never overdone.
Autobiographic
The poem Mr. Bock had written was pretty well-written. Message is clear and voice also good. Word choices were really fantastic! Difference between negative and positive seems to make a big definition through this. He supported the main idea with numerous details and they’re all fun. I can see only pickiest errors, but they don’t really matter the poem. The organization pattern is really good that connects the topic. I cautiously suggest him to give a better idea that helps readers to know that ‘I live in a doorway, between the two rooms’ can really connect the words for negative and positive His ending with comparing negative and positive is pretty good idea. His voices are really good that gives two strong ideas for his topic. His good word choices and descriptions made me more interested into the poem.
New year resolutions
New Year Resolutions!
Writing 1 Standards and Benchmarks
Standard 1. Uses the general skills and strategies of the writing process
In order to revise the paper better to have a more successful writing, my goal is to revise at least three times before writing a final draft through many persons. The methods I am going to use are color-coded edit, and peer edit. Maybe I can even get help from my teacher by coming after school.
Standard 2. Uses the stylistic and rhetorical aspects of writing
In order for me to use precise and descriptive language with a variety of sentence lengths, I set two goals; I will study synonyms and antonyms to be able to play around with the words I know so readers will not get bored by repetitive writing, and to try to vary the length of the sentences by scanning a passage again after writing it. The methods I will be using are reading a lot of books and study the words I don’t know, and practice to write sentences with different lengths at home to get used to it.
Standard 3. Uses grammatical and mechanical conventions in written compositions
To be a better writer I am going to try to have a straight and concise punctuation. To do so, I am going to read a lot of books and underline the verbs to see the patterns of the verb tenses. I will also check my passage when done with writing. I could also study DOL to improve my skills.
Standard 4. Gathers and uses information for research purposes
I am going to try to have a variety of sources of precise and detailed information to have a better writing. To do so, I am going to search on Google for appropriate websites, encyclopedia on internet and in a library, and some magazines if necessary.
Weighted Categories
The two traits I want to be focusing on are organization and sentence fluency because I am weak on those traits comparing to the other four traits. To organize my writing better, I am going to put some effort to scan a passage after writing each paragraph if it has a concise message and if they can be applied to my main thesis of the writing. I will try to delete the repetitive parts as I read my writing over
I will also work more on sentence fluency because I tend to miss some points writing fluent and clear sentences. I will try to read as many books as possible to learn many expressions that can help my writing improve a bit. Maybe I can get some help from American friends I have in dorm and they might be able to check and correct my piece of writing.
Writing 1 Standards and Benchmarks
Standard 1. Uses the general skills and strategies of the writing process
In order to revise the paper better to have a more successful writing, my goal is to revise at least three times before writing a final draft through many persons. The methods I am going to use are color-coded edit, and peer edit. Maybe I can even get help from my teacher by coming after school.
Standard 2. Uses the stylistic and rhetorical aspects of writing
In order for me to use precise and descriptive language with a variety of sentence lengths, I set two goals; I will study synonyms and antonyms to be able to play around with the words I know so readers will not get bored by repetitive writing, and to try to vary the length of the sentences by scanning a passage again after writing it. The methods I will be using are reading a lot of books and study the words I don’t know, and practice to write sentences with different lengths at home to get used to it.
Standard 3. Uses grammatical and mechanical conventions in written compositions
To be a better writer I am going to try to have a straight and concise punctuation. To do so, I am going to read a lot of books and underline the verbs to see the patterns of the verb tenses. I will also check my passage when done with writing. I could also study DOL to improve my skills.
Standard 4. Gathers and uses information for research purposes
I am going to try to have a variety of sources of precise and detailed information to have a better writing. To do so, I am going to search on Google for appropriate websites, encyclopedia on internet and in a library, and some magazines if necessary.
Weighted Categories
The two traits I want to be focusing on are organization and sentence fluency because I am weak on those traits comparing to the other four traits. To organize my writing better, I am going to put some effort to scan a passage after writing each paragraph if it has a concise message and if they can be applied to my main thesis of the writing. I will try to delete the repetitive parts as I read my writing over
I will also work more on sentence fluency because I tend to miss some points writing fluent and clear sentences. I will try to read as many books as possible to learn many expressions that can help my writing improve a bit. Maybe I can get some help from American friends I have in dorm and they might be able to check and correct my piece of writing.
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